Week 12

Week Twelve: Inquiry

What did you find most beneficial about the course?

In my opinion integration of social media and media, writing is the most beneficial in this subject. We always use social media nowadays but I have never though media writing and social media in this way. I learned the important tool social media that can be to deliver news straight to the masses, as well as add strength to a story with things like photos, videos or images.

 What was most challenging?

As I mentioned, Writing is not my strength. I have struggled a lot to write in a presentable way. Writing the story may be a pace of cake for others but it is the hardest work for me. Never the less I have learned so many thinks from this course.

Has the course changed the way you practice or think about media writing? How/why not?

This course has really changed the way I use to thinks about the social media and media writing.

To write a news article or story, there are so many thinks to take consideration to present the story. I never knew how news articles write or presented before took this course.

Week Twelve: Feedback from Assessment One

My assessment one was on average Mark, although I have submitted 15 minutes late.

Some Comments for me on the draft:

A good effort overall. A good blog that shows a reasonable level of engagement with the required activities.

Points for improvement:

  • These blogs were an assignment for University and needed to be written with this in mind where you can relate theory to course work.
  • At the beginning of the course I suggested to the class a couple of times about people who felt their English needed assistance should visit the Academic Learning Centre. The ALC would help you correct your English ie sentence structures, upper case letters for pronouns like ‘I’ etc.

Your strengths were:

  • You made a very good effort to engage with course content generally.
  • Your integration of sources generally was good.

I will check my writing again and try to avoid the mistake I have done in the writing. I will be more care full on my grammar.

 

Quiz

Week 1 Quiz

Week one quiz was easier. Although I didn’t get the entire quiz right. I got only 75% corrects.

Week 2 Quiz:

Week two’s quiz was very technical question. It was very hard to answers. I have rushed to finished answer and I got only 4 answers correct.

Week 3 Quiz:

Week 3 quiz was better than week 2. I have correct seven quizzes out of ten.

Week 4 Quiz

Week 4 quiz was hardest, from all the quiz. I was able to answer only four answers.

Week 5 and Week 6 quiz, I had six correct answers out of ten questions.

Week 7 Quiz

I had correct nine quizzes out of ten questions.

Week 8 Quiz

Quiz 8, 9 and 11 I had correct five quizzes out of ten questions.

Quiz 10

I had correct seven quizzes out of ten questions.

 

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Week 11

Woman stuck under the train at Eagle Junction Train Station, Brisbane.

Original news story link is here

Use of word repetition:

The new article writer has repeated the word “A WOMAN” in this article few times. Instead of using “A WOMAN” writer should use “THE WOMAN”.

Also, there is no information how she stuck under the train.
In news article first few paragraphs writer didn’t mention when the woman was taken to the hospital. It indicates the woman still in under the train.

Mental health guidelines
The reporter has handled the cause of the incident by coating police officer line “self-harm” nicely and according to the guidelines of “Mindframe”. The woman motivation of the injury has not in the report. Also, there are two links at the end of the report for mental support if anyone needed.

My modified article

Woman freed from under the train at Eagle Junction station

A WOMAN has been injured after becoming stuck under a train at a railway station in Brisbane.
Emergency services reportedly freed the woman at 12.55pm. After working more than ½ hour. QAS said the woman was taken to the Royal Brisbane Hospital in a serious condition.
A Queensland Ambulance Service spokeswoman said the woman is currently conscious and has lower leg injuries, as four fire crews were involved in the rescue.
The woman, believed to be in her 30s, was caught under the train at Eagle Junction railway station just after 12pm Wednesday.
The incident is already having a flow on rail commuters traveling through the region, with Airport and Doomben trains experiencing delays of up to 40 minutes.
A witness reports a train full of people was sitting on the platform as the incident unfolds.
Police said they are treating the incident as one of self-harm.

For help with emotional difficulties, contact Lifeline on 13 11 14
For help with depression, contact Beyond Blue on 1300 22 46 36
The SANE Helpline is 1800 18 SANE (7263)

References

O’Brien, C 2014, ‘Woman stuck under train at Eagle Junction Train Station, Brisbane’, Courier Mail Queensland, 10 Sep, viewed 4 October 2016, http://www.couriermail.com.au/news/queensland/woman-stuck-under-train-at-eagle-junction-train-station-brisbane/news-story/3fdffc6978a2cb47b0461d1dbb1177ad

Mindframe ‘Reporting and portrayal of suicide’, viewed 24 September 2016, http://www.mindframe-media.info/for-media/reporting-suicide

 

 

Week 11 Quiz:

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Week eleven quiz was a bit harder for me. I had only 50% right in the first attempt. I was unfamiliar with a lot of these style rules of writing.

from this week quiz and the book “English for Journalists” we can learn, writing doesn’t have to be very competitive and overstate something that is already mentioned.

 

Week 10

Practical – Headline:

1. Forty people were involved in a fight on FakeComicCon.

The headline will get the most attention in a news story about FakeComicCon fight.

2. Fun become Messy in FakeComicCon

Again, this headline will be appropriate how the fight started on FakeComicCon.

3. Ugly Fight brake outside of FakeComicCon

This headline will immediately catch the reader’s attention.

 

Practical – Photo Essay:

On the weekend, I was cooking lunch for me and my brother and I have decided to take the pictures on the entire process and cover the story headline. I have taken the pictures.

1. Cut and Clean the Fish for Fried

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2. Chopping Onion

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3. Preparing Garlic and Chilli

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4. Mixing spices for Fish Marinade

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5. Marinading Fish with Species

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6. Keep in the freezer about one hour for Marinading the Fish

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7. Fried Fish

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8. Sauce for the Fish

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9. Serve with Salad

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10. Eating fried fish

I forgot to take the eating picture. I was enjoying my food.

 

Technical: Complete Quiz 10 – Punctuation

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Quiz 10 was a bit easier than quiz 9. I have done silly mistakes on number 8 I new the answer but unfortunately, click the wrong one. I hope I can remember next time all the punctuation mistakes.

 

Week 9

 

(Source: http://www.iucncsg.org/templates/iucncsg12/images/website/logo.png)

Crocodile Specialist Group Newsletter
VOLUME 35, No. 2
APRIL 2016 – JUNE 2016
Crocodile specialist group newsletter included a number of stories. The newsletter starts with subscription information and editorials. The editorial start with the sad news of one of the most well-known members of CSG (Crocodile Specialist Group) and the good news was in may 2016 352 participants attended from 43 countries in Skukuza , south Africa.
CSG one of more than 100 species specialist groups operating under the auspices of the Species Survival Commission (SSC) of the International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN), the world’s largest consortium of conservation organizations and agencies, the CSG works closely with the Convention on International Trade in Endangered Species of Wild Fauna and Flora (CITES) and other international intergovernmental bodies to promote crocodilian conservation and legal trade that does not threaten the survival of these important reptiles. (iucncsg.org, 2016)
The newsletters stories for the science base and it helps to protect the reptiles special for the crocodiles. The CSG team of experts advises governments and wildlife management agencies, evaluates the conservation needs of crocodilian populations, initiates research projects, conducts surveys of wild populations, provides technical information and training, initiates conservation programs, etc. All their work and science information for the donors. The CSG’s targets audience also the above organizations.
The science journalist there are a lot of interesting information such as, They analyzed available literature on the bushmeat trade in 5 countries in west and central Africa. They also examine temporal changes over a 40-year period. There are results confirm that mammals dominated the trade in all studied areas and time periods, in terms of
(i) Number of species,
(ii) Number of traded individuals, and
(iii) Overall biomass etc.
That information is really in details and important for the future of the reptiles.
As a graphic designer, the newsletter is boring and too plain for me. It looks like they made the layout in Microsoft word. Also, it’s seemed done by the usual worker, not the designer work. In my opinion, they could spend some of the money for the design and get better design not only for the looks for the newsletter also for the get better attention from the donors.

References

Crocodile Specialists Group Newsletter 2016, vol. 35, no. 2, viewed on 2nd October 2016. http://www.iucncsg.org/365_docs/attachments/protarea/2225360a9ab69d58b6f72c37efe77ac6.pdf

 

Quiz: 9

Week 9 quiz was the hard one for me, as English is not my first language, I have mess-up the comma, semicolons, and Punctuation. I had only 5 correct on 1st attempt. With care full reading and helps of internet dictionary get second time correct all of them.     quiz-9

Week 8 (Media Release)

2 June 2016                                        FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE

FAKECOMICCON INVESTIGATES INCIDENT

A physical playfight between two groups of cosplayers become too real and ugly at FakeComicCon in outside of Brisbane convention center.

Two of them was critically injured and total 12 people were injured eight of them were taken to royal Brisbane Hospital and two of these are in intensive care.

The fight lasted around 20 minutes, 40 people were involved in the fight. Who were dressed as Wolverines and Stormtroopers.

The investigation is still ongoing, how the fight started and who were the involved. We want to reassure the public that the FakeComicCon will cooperate with investigators and provide all necessary information to authorities.

John Smith, Queensland Police Service said
“Obviously we’ve had a serious incident here today with a number of people injured. We have arrested four people on a range of charges related to weapons and assault. At this stage, we can’t confirm any specific details but will investigate the matter fully.”

Fake ComicCon CEO Casey Smith said,
“It is very unfortunate and heartbreaking what happened here today, an incident like this, is totally against of the spirit of our event. Our aim is to have fun, enjoy the event peacefully.”

FakeComicCon has run for three years in Brisbane without incident, providing a place for players to come and meet like-minded people. We would like to apologize to the public for what happened here today. We will make sure it will not happen any of our events again.

For additional information:
Jenna Jones
Communications Manager, FakeComicCon
Email: jenna@fakecomiccon.com.au

 

Quiz:

This week’s quiz was considerable hard for me. In my first attempt, I had five correct answers out of ten. Most of my mistakes were about numbers related. “it is acceptable to use phrases such as ‘a substantial number’, ‘a significant minority’, ‘a large proportion’ and ‘a high percentage. The question was a bit confusing to me.

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Week 7

Summarise the key points of this chapter 11 of Media Writing text (Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith).

Key point if chapter 11 of media writing

There are lot of key points such as

  • Try to get the audience attention using background sound.
  • Cover the essential story within the time limit.
  • Applied the inverted pyramid structures writing style.
  • A written script must be provided for the broadcast.
  • A broadcast copy must flow the rhythm of the story.
  • Broadcast writing must be written conversationally, like talking to a friend.
  • Careful of using words that are hard to pronounce and try to avoid words that end in S or TH because they have a hissing sound when on air.
  • Writing must be clear for the broadcast.
  • Use strong active words, subject-verb-subject sentences.
  • Use the active voice. Like (thinks are happening now)
  • Make the newscast interesting for the audiences.
  • Try to avoid the numbers or figures in the beginning because audiences won’t remember them so they will have to be repeated later.
  • Starting the sentence with the person or subject that did the action.

 

What are the key differences between writing for broadcast and print-based media?

There are lots of different in writing in journalism. Journalism began as a print media and remained as such until the invention of the radio and television in the 20th century.

Writing that provides information over radio, television and now, the Internet is known as broadcast journalism.

A broadcast writer must tell a story in short time. Most of the broadcast story need to finish within 30 seconds. The story must be tight and instructive.  Newspaper writer more detail in the story.

The television writer writes visually, showing rather than telling, where appropriate. Newspaper writer provides information using 5W and H method.

Broadcast writing must be written conversationally; like you are talking to a friend.  It is written for the ear, not for the eye (Whitaker, et al., 2012, p. 229).

Reference

Whitaker, WR, Ramsey, JE & Smith, RE, 2012, Media writing: print, broadcast, and public relations, pp. 229-246, Routledge, New York.

 

Practical: Broadcast audio visual script

 

Using the script example from The Process of Writing News, I am trying to convert my existing interview with my family to a broadcast script.

 

TAKE V/O

TAKE VO

Meraj’s brother(Mesbha) and Sister-in-law (Afrose) share the most important thinks in their life are their kids.

TAKE SOT————-

Mesbha SOT

[Mesbha, THE THINGS THAT ARE IMPORTANT TO Mesbha]

RUNS=

OUTQ….

TAKE SOT

“Most important thinks in my life are my kids. I feel complete and happy when I see their happy faces.”

TAKE V/O

TAKE VO

Like most of the people in the world kids are the most important in their life. Like all other parent they are doing every thinks they could for their kids.

TAKE SOT————-

AFROSE SOT

[AFROSE, THE THINGS THAT ARE IMPORTANT TO AFROSE]

RUNS=

OUTQ….

TAKE SOT

“I am willing to do anything to make them happy and it is the best time when I am with them.”

TAKE V/O

TAKE VO

FOLLOWING ARE SOME REASON WHY THEY ARE SO IMPORTANT.

TAKE SOT————-

MESBHA AND AFROSE SOT

[MESBHA AND AFROSE, THE THINGS THAT ARE IMPORTANT TO MESBHA AND AFROSE “WHY”]

RUNS=

OUTQ….

TAKE SOT

“You will understand when you will have kids.  There are no words to describe the feeling when I see the happy. Only people will understand when they have kids”.

 

Technical: Complete “Quiz 7 – Words” and reflect on this briefly

The topic of chapter nine of English for Journalists is “Words”. I read it carefully and I got 9 correct in the 1st attempt. I think the quiz was easy only need to read very carefully.

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